I spend most of my nights laying in bed, my body caught in the state between sleep and consciousness. Though I’m worn from a long lay of studies, my eyes remain open, traversing across the cracks in my ceiling. This period deprives me of some much needed sleep, but is valuable to me nevertheless. My physical senses dampened by darkness, my mind is free to wander. Sometimes my thoughts lead into intimate inquiries- how do I look from another person’s vantage point? How did I do on the test? Did I leave the stove on? In other instances my thoughts revolve around more philosophical questions- does God exist? What is my purpose in this life? Is someone else in the world laying in bed just as I am, mirroring my thoughts? As I close my eyes, the questions still buzz around my head like static. I find peace in the silence that comes from answering each question.
Unfortunately, people in our society don’t question their surroundings and ideals as they should. From an early age, we’re taught to accept information handed down to us as “fact”. In school, we’re trained to copy information right of a textbook then spew it right back out come time for exams. Anyone who questions the curriculum is removed for reducing the efficiency of the machine that is the educational system. In eighth grade, a fellow student of mine was sent to the principal’s office because she refused to partake in a lecture about Darwin’s Theory of Evolution. Students such as her were labeled as “problem children”, discouraging any other students from challenging academic standards.
Society itself prevents us from asking questions. Civilization operates as a whole- trends are adopted, and society members are expected to incorporate it into their busy lives. Those that do question them are outcast by the rest of society.
But what is the cost of not asking questions? Without Galileo, the common notion that the earth was flat would have remained centuries later. The Wright brothers proved that humans could fly, even as their peers laughed at the notion. Segregation might still be an issue today, had it not been for Martin Luther King Jr. When an individual asks questions, mankind benefits as a whole.
Back in my own bed, I laugh at the absurd notion. Mankind as a whole? That must sound so silly to everyone else. I turn on my side and fall asleep.
Warm: I really liked this piece a lot. I loved how you described things like the sentence " my physical senses dampened by darkness, my mind is free to wander.
ReplyDeleteCool: the only thing that I think you could do is give an example of how people don't question their surroundings or ideals
This is a great piece, when i read it it kinda reminded me of a section that i wrote in my piece for this prompt. One thing you could work on is showing and not telling. For example in paragraph two i think you could expand and show a lot more, But overall your piece was fantastic!
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed your piece a lot! It was really nice. I have only one suggestion to make it stronger because it already is an extremely strong piece is if you put in another thing to relate to like how you added about how your friend went to the principals office because of refusing to take apart of a discussion. Overall good job. :)
ReplyDeleteNice piece Collette! :] The transitions between anecdotes and your argument were smooth. I definitely agree with Sophie, about adding specific examples of how mankind does not challenge society.
ReplyDeleteyou had a great piece. i love the fact that your story has the questions that challenge the world and the society as we know it.
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